Wednesday, 6 November 2024

Diagnosis for Madame La Grange By Ruth Broome

 

Now!

Madame La Grange.

You are ageing, you are raging.

How the cold winds whistle through you

now,

that you are empty.

 

Now!

Madame La Grange.

You are creaking, you are leaking.

How the cobwebs collect upon you

now,

that you are useless.

 

Now!

Madame La Grange.

You are sicker, you are bitter.

How the sunlight avoids your eyes

now,

that you are haunted.

 

Now!

Madame La Grange.

You are aching, you are shaking.

How the weeds wrap up around you

now,

that you are forgotten. Now.

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8 comments:

Suzie Pearson said...

Bloody love this!

Irena Szirtes said...

Absolutely agree with Suzie! The form you chose is so effective and it comes across as vibrant and meant! I get the feeling (dare I say it 😆) your VOICE is coming through! I have read it several times and it gets better 👍✍️🏆

Ann Reader said...

Oh yes this is excellent

Liz said...

A masterclass in personification - such a clever take on the task.

Jennie said...

This is wonderful Ruth, a very clever idea- she must have been a horror!

John Ayres-Smith said...

Hi Ruth. Thought I'd leave a footprint to show I'd visited you & indeed The Blog. Almost a first for me. I'm sure what you've written is great as others say so but I'm.filled with external clamour about how little I know about the mechanics of our writers' group.- this blog that I find so irritating to use as one types and the paragraph keeps jumping back and forth and how I cannot fathom.the log navigation. Well, well done you! For even fathoming how to get your writing on here.

I suspect I'm somewhere in no man's land again.

I can't even work out how to go non-anonymous!

Correction - I just did work it out. However, I keep getting error messages re my comment, so maybe you'll never see this comment.

Best wishes: John.

John Ayres-Smith said...

I'd love to know how one can edit one's prevoous comment to get the typos sorted!

John Ayres-Smith said...

First lesson learned. Don't do anything on the blog on a smartphone - use a PC! Otherwise typos will abound!!