Locked indoors, safely drowsing, yet listening, listening
For the heavy screech of the iron gate opening
Listening past fans turning and air-cons purring
Looking out over paw-paw trees and plantain leaves, shadows blowing
For the heavy screech of the iron gate opening
Whilst the mayguards are grumbling, and gambling and watching
Looking out over paw-paw trees and plantain leaves, shadows blowing
And my time stands still
Whilst the mayguards are grumbling, and gambling and watching
And I feel soothed for this is how things have been
And my time stands still
And I am alone
And I feel soothed for this is how things have been
Listening past fans turning and air-cons purring
And I am alone
Locked indoors, safely drowsing, yet listening … listening.
6 comments:
Very evocative use of the pantomime form I particularly like the fans turning....purring
I did write pantoum clearly my spellcheck doesn't like it
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I really like to repeating -ing in this. The pantoum works really well ! I defo need to try it!
Congratulations Liz. A lovely pantoum - a tricky form to master I feel so well done 🙌
I’ve never heard of of a pantoum and I like the idea so will have a go soon.
Liz I like the way you have expressed that awareness of sounds and life going on when you also feel as if you are asleep. I call that my ‘sleep-wake’. It sometimes happens in the night when I am asleep and dreaming but can see the bedroom window and moonlight glinting between the not quite closed curtains.
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